Wednesday, February 29, 2012

"Mysterious Treasure" by Hanifi Caliskan

http://www.kerpoof.com/#/view?s=2gs11buUp0o5czk4kw00-d-831170-x

1 comment:

Melih Caylak said...

Hi Hanifi,
Your story seems good but you have some spelling mistakes such as "tey" instead of "they","MYSTERÄ°OUS" instead of "MYSTERIOUS", "unfortunatly" instead of "unfortunately" "raison" instead of "reason".

Also, you have some grammatical mistakes; "the footprints which was going ...." you should use "were" instead of "was".
Also, you have written " he will died", I could not understand what you tried to say. I think it must be like " he was going to die".