Saturday, February 25, 2012

"Little Trip" by Muhammet Merdivan

http://www.kerpoof.com/#view?s=2gs11bzX7wo5cjc42w00-d-c31e03-x

1 comment:

furkan gumus said...

Muhammet, I am sure that you are actually good at grammmar but you have some mistakes you must not do. For example; "Three childs", plaese never ever do such kind of mistakes.I am sure that you know "three children".Also, you have written "They" in capital letters even if "they is not the first word of the sentence.

On the other hand, there is not a harmony in the follow of the events in your story. Because of this,I have a problem in concentration while I am reading your story, and I need to read the pages again.