...: "The Truth of Nature" by Hatice Metiner

Friday, February 17, 2012

Tufan Gök said...: At the first page of your first story (!) you used "therefore" but it is not correct to use it for explaning the reason.You can use "because,as etc."And in the 4. page of your story there is no "for" before "two weeks" you should use "for" instead of "during" in this situation.
In your some sentences there are no grammar mistakes but meaning of sentences is hard to understand.(6. page)
By the way it's not correct to use "in the same time".You should use "at the same time".
And "momo" isn't cool name for a monster. :); February 17, 2012 at 6:17 AM
nurbanu bulgur said...: Hatice,I like your story, but you should be careful about plural and singular use of nouns. For example, you should have written "there are many common features" instead of "....feature".
However the thing I liked a lot in your story is that there is a harmony between the page backgrounds and the plot.In addition to this, it is very nice behaviour that you appreciate to your friend for her helps at the end of your story. :); February 20, 2012 at 6:06 AM