Sunday, March 4, 2012

"A Moment To Remember" by Elif Karci

http://www.kerpoof.com/#/view?s=2gs11bGSmgo5cjc4vM00-d-e2cf77-x

2 comments:

Melih Caylak said...

Elif, in your passage, you have written "fifty five years old ago" but there is a mistake, you can
not use "old" in this sentence.
You have also some grammatical mistekes such as "She is always looks like...". You should be careful in the use of "to be".

Sometimes Kerpoof doesn't accept some words. You have to pay attention for it and check your story before you send to Pelin Hoca.

I could not understand your story because of the unknown words (symbols) but there is a fact that you should use backgrounds as well as some items.

Hatice Metiner said...

Hi Elif,
Your story is very short and it does not have any pictures because of this,it was difficult for me to understand your story. ı advise you to use background in your stories.