...: "Falling Star" by Elif Karci

Tuesday, February 21, 2012

Hanifi Caliskan said...: Hi Elif, your story seems good but I think it can be better if you pay more attention about a few issues such as title of the story, the general design of the story, parts. When I started to read your story, I confused to find your title. Because you have started with a long sentence and then a second long sentence follows the first one. And the "Part 1: Falling Star" has been written. I could not catch what the title of the story is. When you start with Part 1, I thought that I will read the other parts, but unfortunately, I could not see other parts except Part 1.
Also, in your story there is not any pictures, photos or any character. Because of the long wriiten text, I did not want to read your story. If there were some visual parts, I am sure that it would be better.; February 21, 2012 at 5:49 AM
Nurbanu Bulgur said...: I could not understand what the title of your story is.I think it should be more clear.The written text is too long in each page. I makes the reader tired.You can use visual elements. In addition to this, you can use characters and background to make your story more attractive. Hope to see your new story.. :); February 24, 2012 at 12:46 AM
Anonymous said...: Hey; March 16, 2012 at 4:13 PM
Anonymous said...: http://tufangok.blogspot.com/; March 16, 2012 at 4:14 PM

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