Saturday, January 28, 2012

"Aftermath" by Tunchan Sukur

http://www.kerpoof.com/#/view?s=2gs11bv1ewo5cPc4wkg0-e-6d120a-x

1 comment:

Nurbanu Bulgur said...

Hi Tunçhan,
In one of your sentences, you have written "They might be encounter with such a mighty enemy."
However, the word "encounter" is not used with be. It is an active sentence. If you want to make it passive, you can use " might be encountered". Also you should be careful in the use of " don't, doesn't".You have some spelling mistakes such as " enought" :)
The thing ı like in your story a lot is the harmony between the text and the characters.
Thank you for your stories.:)